Hello, thanks for your help. This is an admission essay for my graduate application. The theme of this paper is to illustrate my interests in quantitative finance, my past experiences, and my academic / career goals.
It would be a big help if you can edit from the following points:
– any grammar/vocabulary misappropriation/mistakes?
– any sentences/expressions not native enough, sounds awkward or unnecessary
– any part of the essay that makes you feel weak/meaningless
Feel free to edit in any other aspects that make the paper better. Thank you very much!